I walk in circles that never seem to end
It’s impossible to tell where I began.
Time passes and it seems impossible to stop.
The endless motions
Of someone who is constantly trying to escape.
The circle sometimes stretches and the space in front of me seems vast.
This is an illusion,
because all the while I am walking on a curve.
I try to escape.
Take a sharp left,
or maybe a right, turn backward.
But this is impossible.
I am chained here,
and there is no direction to go other than forward.
The circle sometimes shrinks.
It becomes even more restrictive,
the world seems to collapse on top of me.
I pass each point more than once,
Revisiting over and over the places I tried to escape,
and failed.
It’s not for lack of trying,
that I remain walking in circles that never seem to end.
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
5 comments:
"The circle sometimes stretches and the space in front of me seems vast.
This is an illusion" I like the brevity of the "this is an illusion" line because it's quite different from the rest of the poem. The poem at points is repetitive, which I suppose goes with the fact that it is about circles and being unable to escape. I would give it a different name though, the word circles comes up a lot in the poem and so having that as a title gives away what it is about.
I think the concept and presentation are wonderful. I completely envision someone stuck in the rut of unsatisfied repetition. The ideas are great and the way you demonstrate them is fantastic. When I read this I saw a person whose life was just an endless trail of misery. But the construction and the..........wait..now I'm stuck in an endless circle.
I really enjoyed reading this poem and felt I could relate to the concept. Using the same opening and closing lines, created a rounded poem. Again generating the image of a circle that one can not escape from. I also see someone working on something and seeing no progress and so they feel like they are going in circles, which prevent them from taking the next step out of the circle in a clearly defined direction.
I think, what I like most about the circle is that it isn't static. There are so many possibilities in this particular circle because it can "shrink" you can revisit older places, you can look at it from various points of view but still be trapped within it. I guess what could have done with some improvement is the "fluidity" of the writing. I couldn't necessarily point out any jarring passages, but sometimes it felt like (at least to me) that a poem about cycles and circles could have been a bit more fluid. I could be wrong though (I personally like reading things with a meter...call me boring)
"Time passes and it seems impossible to stop.
The endless motions
Of someone who is constantly trying to escape."
I dont know if this was your intention with these lines, but I enjoyed reading through this part. I originally read it as two seperate sentiments. he first being, "Time passes and it seems impossible to stop." and the second being, "The endless motions
Of someone who is constantly trying to escape."
On my second read through, I read that as being one sentiment.
I found it interesting how in my head, the line stopped after the word stop, and then continued, yet it could also be read as one long line. As I have mentioned in class, I get as much enjoyment in the actual act of reading and desiphering the structure of a poem as I do the meaning. And on both levels, I thought this phrase nailed it.
Post a Comment